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The Diary Of A Young Girl

Filed under: Anne Frank — novia8 at 5:30 am on Wednesday, November 29, 2006

I wonder whether you can tell me why it is important that people always try so hard to hide their real feelings? How is it that I always behave quite differently from what I should on other people’s company? Why do we trust on another so little? I know there must be a reason, but still I sometimes think it’s horrible that you find you can never really confide in people, even in those who are nearest to you. (Page 139)

1. Write a letter to Anne answering her questions.

Dear Anne Frank,

People try ever so hard to hide their feelings because they believe that they are judged for what they do and look like. They do not want to be known as someone bad, sad, angry, and mad, etc. so they try to camouflage it with fake laughter and smiles. Sometimes after keeping it in so long one day they will break down and get really low and depressed. Some people may even go to the extent of trying to commit suicide, however I really disagree with that for you only have one life but you can pick up countless problems around the corner. Many have lost themselves by being pressured by the public society or maybe because of media or close relations. Many things can affect one person’s behavior and so trying to cure someone depressed is difficult for there are numerous variables that may be causing them to act like this. However some do not want to be known as “the person who seeks help” so they hide it under layers of fake attitudes and characters. Though it only makes them because they feel suppressed and locked up inside. This is probably why you act so different from what you should in other people’s company. You don’t want to be known as a dumb, stupid, careless, sad little girl, so you put on an act so that you become the ideal little princess. Life is like a play, every now and then you change character, sometimes you’re good at playing it and sometimes you’re not, though you keep rehearsing until you finally get it, and when you forget your lines you are out of character, like if you mess up and act clumsy then you are no longer a poised character. So in life many people are always on their toes, trying their best not to forget when they exit and enter and what they should say and do. We trust each other so little, for we do not open up to each other and really talk, we talk with set invisible lines that say nothing about us, but only obvious facts. We only say what is necessary and treat words like glass which can easily slip so we must be careful with what we say or it may break and shatter into a thousand pieces and it would take a lot of work to repair and fix until its ok, but there will always be some dents or hurtful memories that bring back pain and dismay.  At times you cannot fix what you have said and all is lost, ruptured and crippled for as long as we live. We communicate with masks on us and we do not show our true colors and paint over it with something different and unfamiliar. We are too afraid of what we really are an don’t want other people too know, so we decorate it and plaster it with materials and disguises, then we practice our act and try to get in character. Later on we get used to it and start feeling comfortable with it and use the disguise often. People then forget the old you and go along with the new you, though some friends who do not agree drop out on your friendship and you gain new friends who don’t like you for who you are but who you are pretending to be. However when you seek for your old self, you are afraid your new friends will leave for they are not true so you stick with what you are acting as. Soon enough you forget your true identity and become “the mask” and then you are lost, so lost you are too scared to confide in anyone in fear that you get even more distant from the self you once knew, and so you hang on tight and play your part until the one day of which you forget your lines and get sent back to rehearse and audition for a new part once again.
Yours Truly,

Novia

2. Write a post to your readers persuading them to open up and share their ideas, thoughts, and feeling with the world.

People should learn to open themselves to many things and share their knowledge with the world. I believe that many people sometimes feel that their ideas may be stupid or not worthwhile, however if they have some strong supporters they may be a great person one day. Our world practically thrives on opinions, for opinions lead to great discoveries, which leave such great impacts on the world today. Do not be afraid if not all people agree with you for opinions never really have a right answer and are always open for comments. Ideas are another thing many people fear of talking about. They are maybe too self-conscious of what other people may think or are worried that their idea may be useless and so people will judge them through that. Sadly though, in our world today that is mainly true, so many have been keeping their ideas in. The world has been growing and expanding in many ways to finally reach the state it is in today. Imagine that years back we used to think the world was flat and if we were to go too far we were going to fall off the edge and die. Though a great sailor name Christopher Columbus disagreed with this and stated that he was going to sail around the world and prove the world to be round and so he did. Now for the people’s questions of why didn’t Christopher fall of the bottom of the globe, it was answered thanks to the discovery of gravity. Also guess how gravity was found out…it was because one day a normal person just like me and you was sitting under an apple tree, when suddenly an apple fell and there came the gravity theory. All these ideas and discoveries all came from little incidents and brave people having their own opinions and trying to state themselves right with ideas of theirs. A mistake many people make is that they think that their idea must be ideal or the best of the bunch to be able to be expressed, however they are greatly mistaken. Maybe the ideas you give out are not the greatest nor the most perfect, though if everyone hears it and builds on it, as well as corrects it you are set to go and have one idea that had been built on by many others including you. The world today has become more open towards new ideas of others because in the past they have learnt that when one is free to think the results are great and helps many people globally. There have been creative writing workshops and teachers having been pressing students to express their true feelings and try to translate their thoughts into words as accurately as they can, which also helps a student grow in word choice and sentence fluency as well as many others of the 6 traits. All this free thinking can be started as young as 3rd grade for that is when you start being able to put what you feel into words and being able to express what you are trying to say onto paper. Adults sometimes think that maybe these ideas are not as valuable, though great things come in small packages and in order to achieve something huge, you need to start somewhere. Beautiful things take time and so do great ideas so to hone them you should practice and remember to give out small little comments or pointers to the topics. The world needs you to help contribute to help the world go round and continue its progress in technology, learning, and education.



5 Comments

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   milos

Sunece12beSun, 03 Dec 2006 01:02:34 -0800 2, 2006 @ 11:18 PDec

Hi there,

Firts of all I want to say that you wrote a lot, about 1350 words. I think you had good strong voice because you know what you want to say and what you mean with her letter and and the post to persuade people to open-up and share ideas because it can result in many good things, like the discovery of gravity or that Columbus sailed the world to prove that it’s round. Now I think you did a great job on ideas and content (six trait writing rubric) and I think you wrote down everything so nice and neat and how the world could be a better place if everyone gave his ideas and opinion and how everyone would grow and help the world progress in techology, learning and education but think of this, people get killed on the streets for giving there opinion so eventhough it’s good to engage in dialogue and discussion, sometimes it’s just better to think twice and keep your opinion and thought for yourself don’t you think. I think your organization was plainly done because you organized it according to the letter and after the letter came the post to persuade your writers to share opinions, thoughts and ideas.

”We only say what is necessary and treat words like glass which can easily slip so we must be careful with what we say or it may break and shatter into a thousand pieces and it would take a lot of work to repair and fix until it is back to what it used to be”.

This quote touched me the most, I think this is the perfect way to decribes words so with that opinions. Only I don’t agree with the last part; ”it takes a lot of work to repair and fix until it is back to what is used to be”. Sometimes you can uses words in such a way that it can never be ”repaired and fixed” to what it was don’t you agree.

Milos.

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   novia8

Sunece12beSun, 03 Dec 2006 10:57:45 -0800 2, 2006 @ 11:18 PDec

Unfortunately no Milos. I disagree with you because after to say some words after sometimes you can say things to make it better. Apologies are one form of amending things and there are resolutions and if a resolution has a flaw people fix it with amendments (from UN). Also sometimes it is best if one just forget, like the quote “Forgive and forget”. Though yes I do think that one probably shouldn’t blurt the first thing that comes to their minds, however they shouldn’t mull over an idea for too long either.

Novia

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   miki

Monece12beMon, 04 Dec 2006 08:11:12 -0800 2, 2006 @ 11:18 PDec

Hi Novia!
Idea: I think your idea was forcused with strong detail
Organization: It was very logical and you explained a lot
Voice: I think you showed your emotion really well by giving many examples.
You did a great job and you do not have any problems with these 3 traits.

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   Josh

Tueece12beTue, 05 Dec 2006 09:55:16 -0800 2, 2006 @ 11:18 PDec

Hey.
First of all you only needed to do one of the two assignments but I must say you completed both oustandingly!
I totaly agree with everything you said.
Now back to buissness…

Word Choice
You used precise carefully chosen words that energize your writing. You should try not to use the word “like”.

Sentence Fluency
Easy flow and rythm, good variety in length and structure.

Concentions
Strong control of conventions; errors are few and minor. (e.g. you should not say “and so”, or “atop us”)

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   jook

Tueece12beTue, 05 Dec 2006 10:22:26 -0800 2, 2006 @ 11:18 PDec

Hey,

First of all I want to say that I am impressed by how much effort you put in to this.

Word choice:Your words made clear and fresh vivid images in my mind. Great vocabulary you have there!

Sentence Fluency: You had a high degree of craftmanship on your writing but some parts i felt that you were repeating some facts over and over again. Also nice mixture of ID’s and D’s

Conventions: For most of your writing i believe that you had some small little errors which most people wont even notice

Great Job

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